Planetary Alignments of my Universe
Planetary Alignments of my Universe
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Re: Planetary Alignments of my Universe
......You made this?......
There never was much hope... just a fool's hope
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Re: Planetary Alignments of my Universe
This is very good, you should deffinately keep writing!
The day is coming when a single carrot, freshly observed, will set off a revolution.
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Re: Planetary Alignments of my Universe
Thank you
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Re: Planetary Alignments of my Universe
I am out of words......... These poems will be amazing in AOS and AOF
Epic Gamer Moment!
Re: Planetary Alignments of my Universe
beautiful peom! i love it!
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Re: Planetary Alignments of my Universe
Wow, that last poem is very well done
The day is coming when a single carrot, freshly observed, will set off a revolution.
Re: Planetary Alignments of my Universe
Thank you. I have an odd feeling as though its only half finished but it will have to wait for the word to flow in sweet eloquence.
Re: Planetary Alignments of my Universe
very nice! goodluck!
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Re: Planetary Alignments of my Universe
Maybe because the poem sets up a question with multiple hypotheses, but never reveals the answer? I don't think that is necessarily "missing" anything, as I am assuming it is the purpose for love to be left undefined in the poem, but I could see why that might create some kind of expectation for more.FiredClay wrote:Thank you. I have an odd feeling as though its only half finished but it will have to wait for the word to flow in sweet eloquence.
The day is coming when a single carrot, freshly observed, will set off a revolution.
The flow of words in sweet eloquence
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Re: Planetary Alignments of my Universe
lovely....
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Re: Planetary Alignments of my Universe
Nice style
The day is coming when a single carrot, freshly observed, will set off a revolution.